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Query Critique 28
Dear Agent, I have recently completed a Young Adult Thriller Manuscript, I don’t think thriller or manuscript should be capitalized. Definitely not manuscript. consisting of 65,000 words. I read your...
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Query Critique 30
Dear Ms. Nelson, A VOICE AMONG THE THORNS is a 71,000 word contemporary YA novel. Seventeen-year-old Jersey Alexa (Jax) Mason is allergic to drama. But that’s what she gets when her boyfriend dumps her...
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Query Critique 31
Dear Ms. Nelson: Eleven-year-old Olivia Boogieman’s family makes her classmates thinks she eats PB&J (pancreas, brain, and jugular) sandwiches for lunch. Why shouldn’t they, at first I thought...
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Query Critique 33
I commented in purple cause the main character is very manly… And I was too lazy to change away from purple after I chose it. Life as a clone of Alexander the Great is just one big Gordian Knot. I...
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Query Critique 34
Dear Agent, Any human servant would choose the workhouse over Evlalia – and her most recent two just have. Evlalia isn’t a common name, so it took me a minute to understand that that’s who “her”...
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Query Critique 35
Dear ______________, Missy Foxx found one thing more frightening than being bullied.So, having this in past tense feels weird. The query is usually in present tense, even if the novel is past tense....
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Query Critique 46
There is very little actual critique on this query, as it’s already very polished. I think it’s important for writers to be able to see really good queries as well, to have a model to work off of. Dear...
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Query Critique 47
Dear Ms. Nelson, Samuel Morgan is in serious trouble. Part of me likes this, but part of me feels like I want to just be told specifically why he is in serious trouble. Not your average fourteen year...
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Query Critique 49
Dear [Agent Name], I am seeking representation for RISING THROUGH ASHES, a diverse YA fantasy, complete at 97,000 words. To Fallon, high castle walls, armed soldiers and cold are not obstacles. This is...
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Query Critique 66
If being shy around girls were a serious disease, sixteen-year-old Jason Martyr would be on the terminal list. It turns out girls are the least of his worries when a secret government agency abducts...
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